steveMR2010 wrote:
noodley pillow-biting shit
strong criticism
omg I can go where trapt and steve have failed!
-You do a woefully inadequate job of describing their music. By comparing them to Coalesce, mentioning Converge, and making no other concrete effort to describe their general sound, you make them sound like a Deathwish band with effeminate clean vocals.
Just go their MySpace page. You can see what they sound like. (This isn't flippant. Well, it is flippant, but it's a serious point. In the age of bittorrent, MySpace, stereogum streaming, $5 digital albums, and per-track purchasing, do you really still rely on reviews to find out what something "sounds like?" Can of worms? I hope so. Let's get it on, boys!)
-You talk about Axe to Fall for three sentences when it's not relevant.
True, but that doesn't mean it's not interesting in and of itself.
-You contradict yourself. Sinking "to the bottom of failure bay" doesn't = 7/10 to me.
True. These elements are discrepant. I lack a meaningful explanation. Will keep this kind of thing in mind.
-"The employment of these clean vocals is especially unsatisfying when they occur immediately adjacent to the harsh vocals, as on Fleshmaker." is an ugly sentence.
Wordy, yes. Ugly? Idk, maybe.
-You do a good job of transitioning between paragraphs.
Thank you.
-You talk about the clean vocals way too much when your only definite criticism of them is that they're whiny.
Agreed. Could probably have made the point with less words.