Eyesore wrote:
NewFriendAncientEnemy wrote:
Eyesore wrote:
I think you should hit the drawing board again. I don't think any of them are good. They're not creative enough, they don't elicit anything visual.
Nah, I like what we have, then again, if someone suggested something I loved, how could I argue?
Where's your que?
Right there!
Well, let me rephrase, I just don't find them to be very creative. I don't want to say they're generic, but that may be a good word (though far less insulting as it comes off). Post some band lyrics for us.
Okay. The story behind these lyrics are: I posted them in round 1 of the last tourney, lost, but still love them. However, I editted them some, because I believed they could still be better.
And now they are lyrics. I'll post more if anyone wants more...
Song name: Knowledge
Would you wait like me? he asked
And though the moment lingered
I could not quake, spill or banter
Though I tremble to carry what he gave
The thing I desired most,
Now past unto me
A fate not desired by man!
Blasphemer!
Candles, dim now, they flickered
Then faltered, and then
He was gone, My newfound master
Wretched and past
A flicker, but not brief
His passing, punishment
I saw the master's face
In the lightest moment of the candle
A gruesome death molested his demeanor
Into a FOREVER SHRIEK!
1000 years decayed in a moment, and yet
This was relief
His candles died, Mountain side
I wanted to be him, Wished I could be him
But I was alone.
His teachings I must share
Rigors I'd bore finding he, NOTHING compared
This journey I'd bear once more
His fate would be mine too.