Metal Reviews

Alright, here's how this match will work... Lyrics get posted, hopefully within the next 24 hours, then voters can vote up to 48 hours after the 24 hour posting period. Alright? Same rules, but 24 hours extra voting time. Let's get it on!!!

Well, here's my next offering.

First:
"My Completion"

I feel this completion in me
it sends Godlights running down
this creative aspect I know is mine
at one distant remove

(chorus)
Prayers are empty dross
flesh is sanctity and holiness
machinegun nerves slaughter
meaningless external connections

Nothing is needed now
my completion is my own
joined with me at the phallus
through mortal rejection

(chorus)

Violet eye I’ve forced open
I know these shifting shapes
are more valuable than anything
I can be offered

(chorus)

Cold knowledge is never comfort
in the face of the memory
of the smell of fire in my throat
and the familiar knives

(chorus)

It’s all just material
grist for the ever-churning mill
I will never be alone
with this Godlight completion

And second:
"Ascent"

Fish hooks snag my eyelids, rust mixing with
Desperate tears, enough to make the ocean
Overflow, pollute the waters and kill
Everything in it, until the tides
Are as clear as the air. Radiation
Poisons, uneven clicking is no comfort
At all. Knowledge of history is useless.
The flash reaches down here, I’m no turtle.
Floating here keeps me busy in action;
I don’t play in the attic, and a coat
Of gray dust has settled. Windows grimy,
Weightless floorboards tearing away. It was
Built on a foundation of void, or so
I murmur in tongues to myself. Nothing
Drifts by, I know what sent Dorothy through
The stratosphere. Her blue eyes must have been
Open the same time as mine, keeping watch
Over the cubs during the hour the
Wolf prowls. She must have had balloons threaded
Through her spine, all her nerves dead after too
Much helium. Humanity would be
Welcome, no more of the numbing noble
Gasses that saturate the porous flesh of
My hands, puffed fingers like dinner rolls, hot
And flaky and crumbling, ossified junk.
Sails of skin spread from my back, thin and
Bloody as tissue, and the breezeless winds
Buffet me, hapless birdie, no rest for
The falling upwards.

I don’t know why they say madness is a
Descent. You ascend, come apart at the
Seams, fray off from every corner of your skull
Spiraling up into the blank paper sheet.
There’s nothing left, an empty tank scrubbed
And lovingly placed in the autoclave.
Clear eyes have only been repeatedly
Washed, preternatural calm certainly is
Nothing of woman born. Clear plastic bags
Like tide-borne jellyfish refract my lights
And focus them onto ants I cherished.
Porcelain bile and chyme turns like a
Ball bearing against my sternum and a
Knife stuck in my ribs, ripping up my lungs,
Eviscerated and taxidermied,
Sewn up with my original stuffing
A psychic trophy mounted above
A crumbling evanescent mantelpiece,
Missing its label.

My stuff.



and

I will vote Aaron, since his first song is the best from four in my humble opinion. It even has "forest" in it for multiple times. Hehe, don't get me wrong, but they are the only lyrics that actually seem to flow and make sense to me.

Aaron, for the same reasons as Misha.

I wish I had found out about this contest. I'm into songwriting myself.

how about putting you up to emokid, who wanted to participate as well!? anyone agrees?

Eh, are these not the semi-finals? If so, it would be unfair to others if I were to cut in at this stage. So I'd rather wait until a next contest, actually.

Assumably there won't be, and if you first have to face emokid there isn't a problem!

Dead Machine.

Carnifex.

I vote for Aaron.
V.

I thought I said in the last round that both people should put forth only 1 set of lyrics... As long as you both posted 2, I guess it's still fair, but next match, only 1 set!

if I'm not to late, my vote goes to Carnifex

Unfortunately, it's been two days. You're definitely too late, unless we have a 48-hour voting period... which I think we do now...

EDIT - Nevermind, you're not too late. Silly me.

Damn you, trying to steal my precious, precious votes...what, a 4 - 2 margin isn't enough for you?

I admitted a mistake, didn't I? If I was REALLY trying to steal your votes, I'd have edited people's posts who voted for you, since I'm a moderator and all...

But I would never DREAM of doing such a thing...

especially considering that I don't have moderating powers in this section of the forums...

Carnifex

The round is over. For real this time.

In that case, I suppose I've won.

Good show, Carnifex.

EDIT- Oh yeah, Andy, it was over before you posted. 48-hour voting period post the time we post our stuff. It's been more than that.

Congrats, and a good round.