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Author: | OurFinestCoward [ Tue Aug 02, 2005 3:43 pm ] |
Post subject: | Round 1, Match 3, Skaldr/Deadmachine Post 2day, Vote 2Morrow |
Sorry, didn't have access to a comp yesterday night. As for today's match, You guys know the drill. GOOD LUCK! ![]() |
Author: | Dead Machine [ Tue Aug 02, 2005 5:27 pm ] |
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Okay, I couldn't decide which piece of verse to post, so I'll post both of mine in alphabetical order. First one: Quote: Anyway RELIC – of a long-dead past. I’M FEELING – aside not yet cast. Living, hating, they’re just taking Avoid ‘em cause they’re awaking Such reckless humor perpetrated By our guests. Pitting one against three, nobody cares How much you bleed. Fairness ain’t the game, but you Knew that already. Are you Jewish, black or gay? Heaven saves anyway. But they’re all liars so don’t believe those words. NEWLY – haunted man, I can’t stand, I can’t see beyond my hand. Our new rulers dictate: Assimilate, assimilate. They breed whole new creatures What was two is now one. Intertwined within threads Of everlasting, contemptuous fate Are you Jewish, black or gay? Heaven saves, anyway. What was anger will now become Contempt. RAIL – skinny and old, Ineffectual and cold, It’s my last year Or so I’m told. Reign’s over now, I can’t see… They’re the ones that did this to me. They’re all Jewish, black, and gay. But they’ll be saved anyway. Heaven’s pearly gates tainted with their Sin-stained souls. And the second... Quote: Weak
Join me in the crushing dark. Where lucidity is varied and perception is reality Where the faded dreams bleed venom into psyches of the young and old alike Toxic canyon-minds that encompass this creation Waving propagation-spore tendrils In the aged forceful light. Issues are not issues, concerns are not concerns Diabolical convulsions of nightmare density Worry yourself not about such trivial matters. Ages past in apathy can only culminate in emptiness. Parasites of a failed creation that festers like an abscess Upon the ever-changing faces of morality. Souls upon souls spat into the mud like so much garbage Is this what Dante imagined? Or is it what you imagined? Always shifting, never ascending Metamorphing through contempt and hatred Where you would be but one complexity Your adversaries are of millions So many shards of glass in a universal window Encompassing all with a deft reflection Of nothing. For where there is naught to reflect, Nothing will be reflected, And this is the story Of your reflection Indeed, of every reflection Ever to be manifest Upon this planet Would that one could, would one be so foolish As to join them that gibber in the dark To lay hands amongst and upon archetypes of the unknown, To drink with ones eyes the anatomical flaws unbeknownst to the black To bear witness to acts of deformity and the facts of the universe… Yes, one would, for one is weak. As wormy beings hung from the psychic fishhook of need are, Unable to resist. You are all weak. And that's my stuff. Ball's in your court, Skaldr. |
Author: | Skaldr [ Wed Aug 03, 2005 6:09 am ] |
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Hail sorry i'm late i've been in the forest all week-end mostly not writting poetry, so i'm gonna post lyrics of old songs that i'm not too proud of right now. First one are the lyrics of the song werewolves chant that some of you may have heard: Quote: Reborn as a misanthrope I haunt these wood in darkness Nature’s wrath incarnate Failures of man punished A werewolf i am My cursed blessing Autumn’s awake The smell of heaten realms The colors gone The moon calls upon our fangs Forget all love And praise the beast within Can you hear the cries? Can you hear the werewolve’s chants? Next are the lyrics of somambule a song in french that is in my opinion way better than werewolves chants but since it's in french nobody will understand it...BTW this song was mainly inspired by Starry Night by Van Gogh and the movie Das Der Dr. Caligari.... Quote: e regarde le ciel
Mais ne vois que néant J’entends les voix Qui me tirent vers le bas Et je sens l’odeur De l’automne qui s’éveille Mais je continue de me perdre Chaque jour je meurs Mais la nuit je renais… …Carnavalesque odyssée Les lanternes comme seuls guides Mon esprit se dissout Somnambule… …Comme des millions de Lunes Qui pavent ma route d’or Les feuilles mortes chassent l’été Dévotes au mouvement perpétuel Elles me rapellent que je suis mortel Mais que mon âme Par un coup du destin Les accompagnent dans leur cycle… …Sans jamais mourir ni vivre J’aspire au réveil En sachant que la ville Sous mes yeux ternes Dort comme un nourrisson Qui ignore l’immensité Du monde dans lequel il stagne Tandis que je m’effondre Sur une austère colline Somnambule… …Et je vois , En survolant les chaumes Ce qu’aurait pu être ma vie Mais je ne suis qu’un spectre Un triste somnambule. |
Author: | OldSchool [ Wed Aug 03, 2005 10:41 am ] |
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So where are those? Anyway, I'm voting Skaldr, though I dislike the last 2 lines which are too cliche. But other than that it's a pretty nice poem. |
Author: | Metalhead_Bastard [ Wed Aug 03, 2005 10:54 am ] |
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im voting dead machine, the first set of lyrics were the best, imo... skaldr, those were cool, hails! |
Author: | unknownkadath666 [ Wed Aug 03, 2005 2:42 pm ] |
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my vote goes to dead machine, although skaldr was good too. |
Author: | Carnifex Umbris [ Wed Aug 03, 2005 3:10 pm ] |
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Holy crap. I've been debating with myself for an hour and I still haven't decided who to vote for. On the one hand, Skaldr's lyrics are very good, especially taking into account the fact English isn't his native tongue. I love the "Autumn's awake" and "heathen realms" lines. On the other hand, one of his lines is "A werewolf I am." For the life of me, I can't remember the name for that technique, but I hate it. It's incredibly archaic and stiff. Dead Machine's stuff is also very good, though his second entry is just a touch purple. He also does that thing at the beginning of his first entry, with "I'M FEELING - aside not yet cast." Though that one flows better. In the end...I'm going to have to vote Dead Machine. |
Author: | Goat [ Wed Aug 03, 2005 3:38 pm ] |
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It's a hard decision, but ultimately I'm going with Aaron. |
Author: | valefor [ Wed Aug 03, 2005 4:21 pm ] |
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I, too, was torn... but I must go with Aaron. V. |
Author: | deathkvlt [ Wed Aug 03, 2005 4:41 pm ] |
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Some awesome stuff there Skaldr and Aaron; I can imagine some pagan BM anthem with Skaldr's lyrics or some non-stop Thrash fest with Aaron's... Anyway, both were great, but my vote goes to Aaron. PS: Keep up the great work OFC et alii, this is why I love the forum. |
Author: | Skaldr [ Wed Aug 03, 2005 4:57 pm ] |
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BTW i posted the second lyrics. |
Author: | Dead Machine [ Wed Aug 03, 2005 5:03 pm ] |
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Skaldr wrote: BTW i posted the second lyrics.
Woo, I like those better than your Werewolf Chants stuff, and I only understand maybe half the words. Running it through freetranslation.com didn't help, but it's still pretty cool. |
Author: | OurFinestCoward [ Wed Aug 03, 2005 7:02 pm ] |
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I'm debating... Must think for a bit. |
Author: | lizardtail [ Wed Aug 03, 2005 7:48 pm ] |
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A vote for Skaldr. Succint enough to carry a real message. |
Author: | Skaldr [ Wed Aug 03, 2005 7:51 pm ] |
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Dead Machine wrote: Skaldr wrote: BTW i posted the second lyrics. Woo, I like those better than your Werewolf Chants stuff, and I only understand maybe half the words. Running it through freetranslation.com didn't help, but it's still pretty cool. Yeah those in english where my first lyrics and i try to write them mostly in my native language now it's way more easier and the results are always better. |
Author: | Kathaarian [ Wed Aug 03, 2005 7:52 pm ] |
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I vote for Skaldr. Hey, I write a lotta lyrics why am I not in this contest you fuckers? I have like 50. Or do we have to improvise? Or what the fuck? I go to holiday for a while and I miss all the cool stuff. Shit. |
Author: | Metalhead_Bastard [ Wed Aug 03, 2005 9:20 pm ] |
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Kathaarian wrote: I vote for Skaldr.
Hey, I write a lotta lyrics why am I not in this contest you fuckers? I have like 50. Or do we have to improvise? Or what the fuck? I go to holiday for a while and I miss all the cool stuff. Shit. hell, there'll be another comp, plus i got kicked out in the 1st round anyways. |
Author: | Misha [ Wed Aug 03, 2005 10:54 pm ] |
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My problem with Dead Machine's lyrics is that they sound very good, but I don't understand shit of what they mean, and therefore they move me least. I liked the stylistic tricks that Skaldr used, the paradox, pars pro toto, etc. but indeed the last two lines of the first song weren't that good. It's a very hard decision, but I would go for Aaron if it weren't for Skaldr's second song, which made me want to hear more by you, as it reminds me of how I sometimes try to write. Sorry Aaron... |
Author: | Misha [ Wed Aug 03, 2005 10:57 pm ] |
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6 for Aaron, 4 for Skaldr so far... |
Author: | Dead Machine [ Wed Aug 03, 2005 11:08 pm ] |
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Gast1 wrote: My problem with Dead Machine's lyrics is that they sound very good, but I don't understand shit of what they mean, and therefore they move me least. I liked the stylistic tricks that Skaldr used, the paradox, pars pro toto, etc. but indeed the last two lines of the first song weren't that good. It's a very hard decision, but I would go for Aaron if it weren't for Skaldr's second song, which made me want to hear more by you, as it reminds me of how I sometimes try to write. Sorry Aaron...
Dude, it's a meaningless internet contest. No animosity, no nothin'. It would be really silly to get upset over the results of this, and I assure you that whether or not I win, such a thing will not happen. |
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